Wednesday, September 2, 2009

PATERNITY


“You’ll sleep now”

Silence deafened me. With the closure of my eyes darkness was obvious. But it was not the shade of the devil that forbade me from getting sleep. I feared the vision that has been repeatedly visiting me. They say dreams speak about the future. But I was seeing my past. I felt as if those dreams where answering my ever pondering grey cells. All my life, I’d been searching for answers that enthral me, answers to questions about my past.


My life wasn’t a miserable one. I was born filthy rich...posthumous child of a ‘great man’. A great diagnostician who loathed getting himself ‘treated’. ‘Treated’? Just like the rest of the world I didn’t know if he had a thing to be treated for. But the dreams that came in last week spoke things that pierced my eardrum. It was ‘grief’ that killed my father. One tiny blunder cost him the life of his patient. No one enquired about the ‘natural’ death of the 65 year old cardiac patient. But the great man who was treating the guy knew ‘if the first tiny error in his professional career’ hadn’t happened, the guy would’ve had few more years of sufferings on earth.


But that was the story they said last week. Worse revelations followed. I discovered that I was not the only soul within my body. Two men resided in me. Ten incarnations (avatars) were not required to get the lessons that these two individuals taught me in just one life span. After all everything serves a purpose. Life plays its role, just like time does. Angel and demon shared my body. I loved to see smiles everywhere, tried to shower happiness everywhere, failed. God never bestowed me with his powers. ‘Forget him’ I mocked. “I couldn’t build the empire of eternal sunshine...maybe I could demolish the fortress of demons” I thought. That never worked either. Yeah, a lowly mortal I am.


I began as a hero, following the footsteps dad left behind. A true hero I was...then. I enjoyed the warmth of the limelight that lit me. Then I tried to sustain it. The devil was born. Time moved on. I continued to be in disguise. I was still a hero to all. The devil however made sure not a lie that was uttered would end up as grievous blows. So in effect everyone was happy, just like me. ‘Immaculate lies’ are allowed, I figured out.


Dreams began to debate. They said I didn’t walk like my ‘father’, talk like him, act like him. Perhaps I wasn’t his kid.


I threatened to cut my vein. The ground flooded with her tears. What poured out from her was a story of betrayal. It was not the pleasure that a widow would long for, that brought me into this world. The sole friend who extended care to the depressed wife of his beloved friend after his demise had raped her. She didn’t avenge. The rascal’s life was taken away by a drunken driver instead. The entire chain of events remained safe within the walls of her brain. My mother wanted a heir. Wolves would greedily eat away the fortunes, she feared. One ‘immaculate lie’ worked.

Dreams couldn’t say if her heart still burned. I can’t ask them, if she had erred. No...I don’t want them yelling out more truths...I won’t sleep again...

“Wake up now”

B: “Hey...buddy, sweating??? What Happened?”

A: “MAN...U SERIOUS??? All about your dad...and other stuff”(Panting)

B: “ha ha...idiot...right from the time we did our internship I’d been telling you’ll never be good with psychiatry”

A: “Shit...so weren’t actually hypnotised...grrr”

B: “Buddy...anyway you unleashed a master story teller...he he...kudos for that”

A: uuuuuuuuuuuuuu....SMAAAAAAAAASHHHHHHHHH...idiot, you are pathetic with genetics too...

B: ooof :)

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30 comments:

ammu said...

omg ! wats this... a page from a classic!!!!! As i went through this post, thats wat came to ma mind.. i must say the language is really good..
The ending was unexpected..each line had built that element of curiosity of wats going to b next in the poor unsuspecting reader(myself)and at last............................... what else doc, u made me laugh...:)

k.ø.c.h.ü said...

@ammu

so happy 4 dat review m8...actually ive hit de roof, another pal of mine said de same... :) hope dis one reaches all...

Athulya said...

nice ending ..hehe.. themeee ..i think some complex twist can also be included isn't?......any way u have a future in it ya..

k.ø.c.h.ü said...

@athulya

future ha :) yeah star writer in de making :)

thnx buddy,.keep in touch

Priya Joyce said...

The post simply glued me to it...with great twists at every point ..
n the last point..I simply burst out into a laugh..
well
am not surprised ...cos as i've said that earlier also u sure wud make it to being even bettr tan C Bhagat.

ARJUN MS said...

Hi Dr.
Amazing .............
The ending was absolutely superb.
I never expected it.
I liked the twist very much.
Once again amazing ..........
I cant express more i am speechless.

k.ø.c.h.ü said...

@priya

yippieeeeeeee cloud nine again..!! keep waitin dear sumday ill get u 'premanently glued' wid a better work...!!!! thnx a lot :)

k.ø.c.h.ü said...

@arjun

thnx a lot buddy...actually this post is sumthin dat gave me kinda satisfaction after a while... :)

keep in touch...n keep firing...!!! :)

Me said...

Oooh...what do we have here?? It was very very good.. :)

k.ø.c.h.ü said...

@me

:) thnx a trillion chetta

jackinthebox said...

Nice work, Nithin! In fact, this adds a whole new dimension to your writing... I'd read only the humorous ones earlier. :)

k.ø.c.h.ü said...

@jack

:) thnx m8...
keep glued ... :)

Diva said...

Ok, lemme get a lil' critical here... I am kinda familiar with your style of writing now... so the ending wasnt totally unexpected!!! Try smthing better to impress me this time ;)

k.ø.c.h.ü said...

@diva

ha ha...:) sure sweet heart...hero'll b bak...

nikhil said...

these days ur posts are really borin mann..... :(

k.ø.c.h.ü said...

@nikhil

really? :) he he..adoor gopalakrishnan too is a maestro :)

peter said...

captivating for sure :)
but the ends was the best ...liked it !

k.ø.c.h.ü said...

@peter

:) :)

Diana. said...

A lot of twists and written in a kinda language that I love reading.

k.ø.c.h.ü said...

@diana

:) n i had 2 threaten sum1 2 break her legs 2 read dis...!!

V. Archana said...

Man! i really thought u were getting some weird visions about ur past birth or something :P

hahaha! psychiatry effect ah? ROFL ROFL

pretty good though.. docs can also get humorous sometimes (but this is an antique,always funny :P )

k.ø.c.h.ü said...

@archana

he he :) has been tellin u since de birth of mankind...'docz r not dat serious' :)

n im from de latest genre :) antique ha?grrrr...dishum dishum

joie de vivre said...

gosh I was so carried away in the middle half of the post...

one line I really liked..***angels n demons share the body, it is jus so meaninful and universal

k.ø.c.h.ü said...

@neha

wat makes me most happy is de 'brivitycreep' managing to readthis looooong post of mine :) :) :)

Rane (The Orchid with All Shades Pink) said...

ha ha ha ha ha ha ha! you made me laugh..really.. you are a master story teller..that's what i will call surprises in store..wow!

Rane

k.ø.c.h.ü said...

@rane

he he..self proclaimed one :)

Destiny's child... said...

My first time here.
The story was kinda intriguing until the end when you broke the suspense! ;)
Nice read, I must add...:)

k.ø.c.h.ü said...

@destiny's child

:) thnx a trillion m8...keep in touch

SMRITI said...

Okaye so this has been pending for a while now.

I've been allergic to blogs for a while now, but whenever i decided to see them, yours is the first one I come to.

Good things first:
Narration was awesome.. I liked the flow of the story. Kept me gripped completely. The old Kochu who used to go
"kkk...biff...bang.." types in his writing style, seems to have subdued...rather, grown up. Loved that :) I see immense potential here ;)

Bad things:
Just didn't like the ending, although saw it coming. Was expecting you might just twist it differently. But this isn't how I expected you to twist it. So yo better get better at that :P :P :P

All said, it was an enjoyable piece nevertheless! :)

Hugzzzz you Monkey!!!

k.ø.c.h.ü said...

@smriti

u know what dollz dis is wat ive been waitin 4..!!!!!1 yippieee..dollz finally bak!!!!!1 my all time fav reviewer :)