Saturday, October 17, 2009

TELL HER I CAME...THAT I KEPT MY WORD


10:15am

Oh! No...This shouldn’t be real. It’s indeed true that in 22 years of my existence, there has not been a single instance when I did something on time. But this time around...I won’t beg for pardon. How could I be late? Where did I go...what was I doing for the past fifteen minutes...? God Oh God...tell me my watch is a liar.

10 o’ clock was my decision. I think she said ‘yes’ to it. Or did she? In spite of the crystal clear reception I had barely breathed just to make sure that I wouldn’t miss a word that she said. Yeah she said ‘yes’.

Hey, should I panic? After all, if everything works fine, I’m supposed to lock her up for a life time...in my heart. So is fifteen minutes all that long?

Oh...it is...

We’ve known each other for more than a year now...and imagine the kind of amusement that’ll shower upon even the hardest of the souls when they know that this is the first time we are meeting. I think that’ll explain the length of these fifteen minutes.

I believe this’ll be the longest fifteen minutes in her life.

Wait...what’s that rush out there...? Whatever it is, I don’t have seconds or minutes to spare. It’s not because I’m selfish, but...I have things that are more vital to my life. After all it’s my life that I’m supposed to take care of...

Okay...fine...I am selfish...got that? O...o...I am wasting my time again...Run Forrest run!!! Princess is waiting for you.

It was a year back when she wrongly typed in an e-mail address. She never knew that my heart would end up as the inbox. Ever heard of a love story that began with the heroine sending her resume to the hero? In our case...that happened.

What is she going to look like? Well...don’t jeer at me...it’s a fact that I never asked for her picture. All that I have is the description that poured out of the only common friend we had...

I know her voice. For, it’s the mesmerising ‘hello’ that flew through the telephone line that created ripples in my ear drum and later in my heart. My interests in her sprouted up in the orchard of ‘chat rooms’! I still remember the tremor with which I typed in ‘can you give me your phone number’.

That is the past...and today...after a year of romance through words, I’ll meet her. Do I really expect the beauty of my dreams? Is she going be taller than me? Is the colour contrast going to be too ‘drastic’? O...o...god...should I really care? Well...now I know...Love is blind!!! But just imagine...my wedding, and reality returning with a vengeance. He he...!!!

OOOOfffff at last...Thar she blows!!!!

That bench in the park...and there she sits...the unseen princess of my life.

Oh! I can’t see her face...

I’ll slowly give you a surprise ‘hi’ from your back!!! Here I come...here...

Closer...almost there...

O...am I supposed to believe this...!!! She is a charming fairy!!! O...!!! LUCKY DUDE!!!

Yeah...now is the time...

Hey is she nervous? Yeah...she should be!!! Her fingers must have fatigued hitting the call button in her mobile. Poor princess! Wait...why isn’t my mobile still ringing?

Shall I touch her? Ooo...

“HELLO...ARE YOU THE BEAUTY WHO HAS BEEN CHATTING WITH A PRINCE FOR MORE THAN A YEAR? WELL...I BELIEVE I AM LATE...BY SAY...20 MINUTES!!!”

I think I sounded majestic! But is she deaf?

“HELLO???”

Is there a problem?

“HEY, it’s me Nithin. Hello.”

Oh! Is this girl blind?

Hey...there is a problem..."Sneha...can’t you see me? "

Is this supposed to be a prank?

She is still pressing those buttons in her mobile. Why in the world isn’t my mobile ringing?

Aaaha...well two can play this game, let me see...I’ll share this corner of the bench

Wait...Hey man...what...are you planning to sit on my lap? Oh...C’mon...You stink...Oh there should be an asylum to keep lunatics like you.

Ooooo...no no...I’ll rise...

Wait...your watch is blood stained...

Hey that’s mine...this is not possible...

Sneha is trying again. K...K...no more games...

But but...something’s lit up in the shaggy pocket of the tramp.

That’s my ringtone...

Oh! There she looked up expectantly...and for a brief moment I think I saw a gleam in her eyes...

My princess...

Seeing the tramp she looked away...

I saw tears swelling up in her eyes. She rose, silent, walked off into the distance...

(Thanks to Azgar...and someone else...)

34 comments:

ammu said...

omg! dr bak to romancing...lovely write up...well i dint like the tragic end..(not that i dint like the story; i dont like the sad endings).
i dont know if this story is fact or fiction, but it did hav a few facts of my life...good work dr.

Me said...

it was nice.. :)

but the end was expected and this concept has been used so many times..

k.ø.c.h.ü said...

@AMMU

yeah...wid de previous posts filled wid my evil deeds, thought of takin a break :) well...itz fiction niway :)

k.ø.c.h.ü said...

@Me

aaha..!!! C is wat happens wen god decided 2 send Adam instead of me...first 2 earth...!! gotta get patents...o my concepts...:)

V. S. A . said...

...and whose that someone else? ;)

aqua gurl said...

I actually read this one:D:D:D

THIS IS GOOOOODDDDDDD!!!

k.ø.c.h.ü said...

@VSA

"suspence" "fiction"...
:)

k.ø.c.h.ü said...

@aqua gal

yeah yeah...dont tell me i didnt warn u...itz once in a blue moon dat u reach here dese days..yer rib cage n Distal arm bones r at risk of fracture...hope u know my super powers u silly super gal :)

Hemanth Potluri said...

:)...nicely done :)..romance in the air...

urs..hemu..

chinnu said...

superb... really touching..

k.ø.c.h.ü said...

@hemz

:)

k.ø.c.h.ü said...

@chinnu

thnx :) keep in touch

nikhil said...

ok... i will tell 'her'

k.ø.c.h.ü said...

@NIKHIL

he he

chinnu said...

"IMMORTAL LUV" gud theme n presentatn..

Priya Joyce said...

The word "fiction" dussn't suit :P:P


bt this rocks...luked liked u're talking from personal experience :P

we nevr know ;)

fabulous !!

k.ø.c.h.ü said...

@chinnu

thnx once again ;)

k.ø.c.h.ü said...

@priya

ahem ahem...!!!

Destiny's child... said...

I didn't quite get it Kochu...I mean what happened? The girl left coz she didn't like the look of the guy or was it becoz he was late?
I was expecting something exciting to happen towards the end, considering the vivid descriptions you gave in the beginning...I liked that part...the anticipation..tell meabt the rest..
and chk this out...
http://destinyschildsspace.blogspot.com/2008/09/blind-date.html

k.ø.c.h.ü said...

@destiny's child

o o...u should've read it couple of times. Actually in de tale Our hero is dead. Probably in an accident. Throughout de story what v find is de ghost or literally de Wish of de hero.he could never c de love of his life. De Tramp might have recovered de watch n mobile from de site of accident or etc. Ha well...i've however left over a question mark 4 de readers. Hence your guess is okay :-)

Anonymous said...

hey nice write up doc....and thx for visiting my blog...you have a nice blog running...:D

regards
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k.ø.c.h.ü said...

@anonymous
:-) cheers :-)

Destiny's child... said...

Oh..ok...that's nice...
I guess I am a dumbhead not have understood that! :D
Thanks for clarifying my doubt. :)

Destiny's child... said...

I read it once again and it did make sense. Perhaps you should put those dialogues within quotation marks. That will take off the ambiguity and help the reader understand (and appreciate) the story...:)

Amal Bose said...

something is waiting for u at my place :)

k.ø.c.h.ü said...

@destiny
:-) thanks a trillion 4 de interest you've shown :-)

hmmm well i wanted de ambiguity part :) but couldn't compromise de appreciation part :-) n hmmm if u closely observe you'll find that de only dialogues are already highlighted in bold. Rest were his thoughts. N yeah your advice should work out n add more clarity. I'll make that dialogue in bold too as soon as i get a pc. It's tough while browsing via mobile :(

k.ø.c.h.ü said...

@amal
hero's on de way da :-) :-)

senthilkumar said...

Hi doctor, loved it to the core...
looks like it was happening....tel me what happenend after that...

k.ø.c.h.ü said...

@senthil
hello n Hi :-) i think this is your first visit :-) n hey i'm yet 2 become a doctor :-) now in de "final" stage of de game :-) n about de story, well "they lived happily ever after"

Athulya said...

really touching ya..unexpected end..... i heard that wants to say so many things but not get enough words to express... thats the main problem we are facing during the time of algorithm also.. how do u get the apt words ?? words are the highlights of every stories na?ans:talking from personal experience, ?? hehe

k.ø.c.h.ü said...

@athulya
yeah yeah it was real. I was dead. N i'm de first ghost 2 start a blog he he :)

Anonymous said...

It agree, very useful message

Netha Hussain said...

Nicely penned..You have full control on the hero and heroine, so you could have thought about a better ending, like the girl meeting the guy and deciding to marry, and so on..I liked the way you expressed the whole story, the way you created moments of anxiety and anticipation..This one would have won a prize had it been for the intermedicos story writing competition..:)

k.ø.c.h.ü said...

@netha

intermedicoz ha !! ;) that was cool ;)